They were stuck in a cave
Against their will
Held there till the grave
Never to live life to it's fill
Prisoners were held to see
Only shadows
That was their reality
They lived in the nightglow
One man's freedom
To step outside
To gain wisdom
Of the world they've been denied
The man felt strong and fufilled
While the others were lost and unskilled
I like it, straight to the point and clear. Also you followed the structure of a sonnet so good job!!
ReplyDeleteGood job I liked it and it had good structure. :)
ReplyDeleteI really like the rhymes in your sonnet. Good job && can you please comment on mine as well (:
ReplyDeleteI like how its direct to the point and good rhyming! Good job!:D
ReplyDeleteI second Feli in that it was straightforward with no fluff! All in all it was a pretty good sonnet.
ReplyDeleteConcise to the point as well as creative in its delivery of the themes of the allegory, you did a great job as always Kayla!
ReplyDeleteI like that your sonnet was straight to the point and was clear. I also really enjoyed your last two lines. Great job!
ReplyDeleteNice sonnet! It gives a good depiction of what the allegory is all about.
ReplyDeleteSome of the Rhyming Scheme was off...Other than that Great Job! Nice Sonnet!
ReplyDeleteNice Sonnet. Very short but straight to the point. Which is nice. It touched on the allegory, and the structure was there. Good job Kayla!
ReplyDeleteIf you get the chance will comment mine please?!
http://sramirezrhsenglitcomp.blogspot.com/2012/11/blog-post_23.html
Straight to the point and gives an accurate summary of the allegory. Well done Kayla!
ReplyDeleteRemember that the sonnet also has to be written in iambic pentameter, the pattern of 10 syllables. Good job however, showing the distinction between the two reality's throughout the sonnet.
ReplyDeleteGreat understanding of the allegory of the cave and very well written! Just make sure to use iambic pantameter!
ReplyDeleteRhyming and straight to the point.... I like it :)
ReplyDeleteI like the first stanza. It makes me wonder who put the prisoners in the cave and why. Could you please comment to my blog as well?
ReplyDeleteYour couplet really sums up the entire sonnet good job
ReplyDeleteThe rhyming was simple, and it's obvious you understand the allegory. Good job :)
ReplyDeleteI like it :) You get right to your point and its well done.
ReplyDeletegood job! the first line drew me in immediateely :)
ReplyDeleteI like how it rhymes. Good Job!
ReplyDeleteSummarizes the theme nicely.
The third stanza is probably the best, in my opinion. :) Nice simple sonnet about the Allegory of the Cave. Nice Kayla!
ReplyDeleteI really like that your sonnet is straightforward! It gets the message across(: good job Kayla!
ReplyDeleteOhh I like it :) Nice job Kayla. It is very simple but straight out! good job :D
ReplyDeleteI really like the diction in the sonnet. Good job!
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